| 2006-03-13 21:44:17 |
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Thank You!
Jmt |
| 2006-03-14 04:49:38 |
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I have a few things to say. First of all, you're a god on this site. I've never read such well writen stories. The plot is actually so great. It makes picturing all this so easily. Though, one thing I noticed on this last story. You made some screw ups confusing Jake with Neil towards the end. As for people bitching about you killing him off. It needed to be done, the way you built it up in the last two. It would have sucked if he didn't die. But as for turning this into a book? Fuck that, I want to see the movie, I think it would make an awesome movie, one of a kind story line.
Also, as for what some others said about not ending the story here. PLEASE DON'T. This is the best story on the site, no questions about it. Make it so Jake and Cindy start to get corrupted and start using the LMM to 'get back' at people for what happened to them. With a story line like that, there could be a book, with more then one part. And a movie with more then one part. It will never get old, as for someone saying there is too much sex. Yeah, I might agree sorta. Does get sore after a while, but everything is so detailed, can't help but get rock hard again from it all. Please, continue. If anyone bitches and tells you it sucks, they're jealous. You're the best, you've got my support. |
| 2006-03-14 16:00:48 |
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JMT us men dont like to read about guys cutting off thier dicks, why couldnt Niel just have set himself on fire or something? It kills the ambience. I had to stop jerking off at that point. LOL |
| 2006-03-14 18:00:07 |
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Sorry about that, it does strike a nerve I agree, But it was the perfect response from the woman who gave him the command. I know many women who would like to do that very same thing to a man. Thanks for taking time to comment....its okay if you don't like this and that....at least you read it.
Peace
Jmt |
| 2006-03-15 18:07:06 |
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"i like your shoes, do you want to fuck?"
isn't it "nice shoes, wanna fuck?" ;)
anyway, great story! i kinda hoped Neil would get out of it, but at least the colonel didn't win :). Nice ending and your right, that's exactly what Cindy would have commanded him to do.
Finally i hope you keep writing, you think you are gifted ..
T |