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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-11-18 13:38:49 | End of the world - Chapter 8 | You've got a fine first draft here. If you revise it, you could be (closer to) worthy of all the praise you're getting from these morons. |
| 2006-11-18 20:20:41 | End of the world - Chapter 8 | I feel as if I had grown up alonside these people! All the ingredients of a great story, and the ending was heart-wrenching. The sexual scenes were stunning...erotic without being prurient, if that makes sense. But a strange thing happened as I was reading them, I found myself hurrying through them to get back to the story-line, when usually, I do just the opposite. Now, if that isn't a sign of good story-telling I don't know what is! |
| 2006-11-19 03:02:27 | End of the world - Chapter 8 | Remarkably excellent story for one so graphically erotic. Made good reading from several viewpoints, action and sexuality. With intensive editing to keep the story line flowing and accurate in so far as names of characters are concerned, could make a best selling novel. |
| 2006-11-19 12:05:50 | End of the world - Chapter 8 | Struggle to fill in the blanks and edit this excellent draft into something a bit more palatable for the general public - then seek out the publishers. This has interesting potential - we each can envision several books, as U.S. civilization is Phoenix'd and spreads throughout the world, encountering and enveloping others along the way. |
| 2006-11-23 01:12:22 | End of the world - Chapter 8 | snif* wut a sad ending to a sex story ah? ahhh but wut good fun it was to read it. take out the sex fill in a few things and you would have a stroy to show evry one ah. But thw sex and love is wut made it best. And wen he die'd the you made it was difrent a good way to show he was ding(not that that was a good thing that he die'd) but ill i have to say is you start this stoy with a hard on and end with a tear in your eye |