| 2007-01-28 01:41:46 |
Naughty Pretty Things
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It was a pretty good story. The writing style and subject don't appeal to me much, but for what it is I think it was pretty good. My first instinct was to berate you for shallow and unbelievable characters that distract from the story, but it seems that it has its niche so I can't complain just because it isn't my particular fetish. The descriptions are good, but try to make them fuller if at all possible, and I agree with what everyone above says about spellcheck. Its free, its available, and it would improve your work greatly. Also don't defend yourself to people that give negative comments, it makes it harder to take you seriously. The above may sound harsh, but I did rate it 7/10 |