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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-05-20 02:26:06 | Mixed Metaphors | To 05-07-07 17:04 Thanks for the comments. When you said, “the paternal resemblance was a nice sentimental touch at the end,” I hope you are aware that the story continues for at least fifteen additional chapters. The readers were not satisfied with one chapter and the story got away from me. I hope you will take the time to read the rest of the story and make comments as you see fit. Thanks again. og |
| 2007-06-24 18:47:14 | Mixed Metaphors | For a person who states at the top of the pages "rules" to be a good writer, you don't really keep with them. For starters, in that top bit, you spelt "metaphors" wrong (no "es" at the end) and then went on to mis-used your commas and several times spell "clean" as "clean". Also, that "oxymoron" bit was pointless and obviously you showing off! As for the story, however, can't fault you much. Shame you couldn't leave gaps in time, cause it ain't exactly realistic. It goes: "Hi Mister Janitor"> Random date> Sex baby?> Move in with me and let me meet your family - all in the space of... what? 17 hours? It was a good read, but I think some tweaking would have helped. |
| 2007-06-24 19:18:20 | Mixed Metaphors | And what the hell happened to all my capitals?! Why does this posting system remove all but on capital?! |
| 2007-07-27 03:38:20 | Mixed Metaphors | i was jerkin to this |
| 2007-08-24 03:18:59 | Mixed Metaphors | This was amazing. |