| 2007-07-10 23:21:19 |
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Great work 10/10 |
| 2007-07-11 05:31:34 |
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Fantastic writing, no major grammar mistakes. Loved it, keep up the good work. With length comes an amazing story. 10/10 |
| 2007-07-11 20:20:06 |
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Ok, I will admit the longevity of the beginning almost made me move on, but I'm glad I kept reading. Great work and a quality story. You had enough in there to satisfy all my little dirty kinks, although I wouldn't have been mad if Alyssa had been more involved. WRITE MORE and IGNORE the lame losers who just want to get off and can't enjoy an actual story occassionally. |
| 2007-07-12 15:33:50 |
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ttoooooooooooooooo llllllooooooooooooooooooooo... |
| 2007-07-12 15:47:58 |
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too llllllllloooooooonnnnnngggg... |