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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-09-08 00:08:26 | Midnight Swim | loved it, but plz, next time, spell check your story, grammer mistakes and typos are a huge distraction. |
| 2007-09-08 02:24:15 | Midnight Swim | 1. lydia? 2. grammar man 3. not so much detail in unimportant areas 4. good job overall, enjoyed it |
| 2007-09-08 06:11:18 | Midnight Swim | i was blown away....... im in love with my best friend and that would be the perfect way for us to hook up... eagerly awating a part 2 |
| 2007-09-08 13:30:59 | Midnight Swim | Lydia is from a different story. Huge typo I know. But the grammer mistakes.. thats just how I talk.Part 2 should be here soon. check out the new allie and me while your waiting. |
| 2007-09-09 20:23:36 | Midnight Swim | Lots of potential. You're great at writing romance and foreplay, but you didn't do so much with the sex. If it really was her first time, you should have had just a tiny bit more detail about their fucking. Losing your virginity sort of changes your view of the world; it deserves more than "a few seconds of pushing in her". Put as much effort into describing the sex as the love and this would be tip-top. =dreamer= |