2004-07-27 07:24:42 |
Cheerleader Virgin Fucks
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I rated the story a little higher than it should, it needs lots refinement, but mostly being real. Talk it over with someone , (experienced) and rework it. But most of all don't give up.. |
2004-07-27 23:29:28 |
Cheerleader Virgin Fucks
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You have to improve your spelling and grammar a lot, if you want the readers to follow the story. Your conclusion arrived too fast and there was no build up at the front. so-so, not terrible for a first. |
2004-07-28 03:27:14 |
Cheerleader Virgin Fucks
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Dhampyre dude yur a suck ass |
2004-07-28 07:38:16 |
Cheerleader Virgin Fucks
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u should get to know ur types of sex such as bestiality is sex with animals not ppl get ur act straight |
2004-07-28 14:37:14 |
Cheerleader Virgin Fucks
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real good story, I can't wait to read more about this little teens getting fuck more by her dog and showing to other friend. |