| 2005-06-19 18:51:52 |
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I could have written a fairly extensive review, but ill keep it short.
This story has several unique characteristics, both good and bad. For instance, I like the ammount of detail you go into, and your excellent use of spelling and grammar. However, several of the scenes get repatitive, although all are great to read.
The story is incredibly lengthy (all 69 MS word pages of it !), but I took the time to read it all.
It appears that you tried to go into several different genres of erotic literature (ie: rape, sex in public places, unifor sex, etc). It is nice that you try to appeal to everyone, but I think sticking to one main genre would be better next time.
Besides that, it was an absoluteley amazing story. I'm going to give this a 10, and I feel that it truly deserves it.
Oh, and for those of you who bitch about "its too y0ung you p3rv!1", you can all suck it. It CLEARLY states "young" in the description, and if you don't have the mental capacity to see this, then i don't even know how you are able to use the computer to access this site. |