| 2007-07-29 10:16:19 |
my night with amanda
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love it make more |
| 2007-09-14 22:03:27 |
my night with amanda
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Pretty good yo. Work on your grammer and spelling, and you'll be crankin out stories that make everyone else crank on out. I'd give it a 7 out of 10. |
| 2007-11-15 20:47:48 |
my night with amanda
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hottt |
| 2006-08-05 16:29:26 |
MY FIRST THREESOME_(4)
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you have some pontential but you rushed the story way too much, it's okay to slow down and smell the roses so to speak. also you might want to brush up on your grammer a bit. AND FOR GOD SAKES IF NOTHING ELSE USE PARAGRAPH BREAKS! |
| 2006-08-06 23:22:35 |
MY FIRST THREESOME_(4)
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i couldnt agree more wit dragoon. u will get the hang of things but i like ur enthusisasm. wrok on grammar and story length. plot is good though |