| 2007-07-21 17:56:50 |
Daddy, Please!!
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its was ok... u REALLY need to use the spell check... at first it was ok abut once you got to the good parts it turned bad... i hope part two is better... |
| 2007-07-25 15:51:27 |
Daddy, Please!!
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MORE !!! |
| 2007-07-26 03:31:43 |
Daddy, Please!!
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As you can tell by the other people who commented, this story didn't capture the readers attention. It was a nice story with a nice concept, but it seems to me, you was only writing it to get off yourself. If you are serious about writing these stories, then put more detail into it, and use spell checker. 5/10 |
| 2007-07-27 10:05:37 |
Daddy, Please!!
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People this isnt a site for spelling, its a site for sex stories, so stop complaining, to all the people who flame these kind of stories saying they are rubbish and that people who read them must die or whatever, just remember you read it yourself, As for the story i would give it 5/10 it needed more things to happen |
| 2007-08-09 06:28:56 |
Daddy, Please!!
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you mutha fucking retart learn how to spell you donkey raping shit eater |