| 2008-02-25 20:12:00 |
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I loved it though I had to fight myself to read it all . . . and I did. I'm an editor so here goes: you misused 'excoriate' you misspelled sheer, instead using the homonym, 'shear' You do not use 'lay' and 'lie' correctly. One intransitive -- I lie on the bed (lie, lay, lain) and the other transitive, The chicken laid an egg. The action goes to the egg, a direct object. But grammar aside, I could identify with your story line, which was fantasy but an acceptable situation you created. Great job. |